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You can call your friend abroad no matter what time it is, and you can use any products that were manufactured abroad. Also, you can see dramas or movies from other countries, and you can meet foreigners from various countries if you go outside. These are all phenomenons that globalization has created. Globalization has connected and made people communicate each other more easily and flexibly. After the internet has been created, internet has contributed globalization in the Earth a lot because people can be connected on the website more easily than real life. However, we should think about the globalization and internet's contribution to globalization is positive or helpful to the people all around the world. Even though globalization and internet have made a better world, internet's contribution to globalization is negative.
The definitions of ‘globalization’ are various. However, they have a common idea that globalization is the process of interaction and integration in economic, cultural, and financial worldwide within various nations.
Many people think globalization is a recent one, but we can find globalization from thousand years ago. We can say the examples of trades many years ago between the eastern countries and western countries. The merchants from both side sold their products to other merchants from different region, and the path named Silk Road connected areas in a distant such as Central Asia, China, and Europe, is the proof of their trades. In fact, the current wave of globalization which everybody knew began after the Second World War. After the war, many governments have adopted free market and open economic systems and policies. The international trades and investments increased between various countries. Many governments removed barriers in commerce and have established international agreements to promote trade in goods, services, and investments. Corporations took advantage of new opportunities in foreign markets, and they started built their factories in foreign areas. Also, a huge amount of people immigrated and migrated.
Nowadays, Internet, affects a lot to people's lives in various areas. For example, the Internet enables companies to promote productivity through by much faster access of information and electronic transactions. Also, new jobs are created such as IT professionals and engineers. Internet has altered the structure of the mass media: local and national news changed into world wide news. From these points, Internet is indeed the major advancement in the modern era which make people easily connect, contact, and control other people and world.
All the aspects of Internet can prove that Internet has a significance on globalization. Due to the technological development, globalization has been facilitated. Mostly, internet promotes faster and easier communication. Internet provides cheaper and faster method of communication such as fast phone calls in a distance through web, and web cameras, microphones, messengers are all technologies that make people communicate with other people far from them through the Internet. These new types of communication which internet provide has a significant impact of globalization because it connects people all over the world.
Because of the globalization's effects, people think globalization positively. At first, people consider globalization as the greater opportunity for people around the world for economical increased standard of living. Furthermore, There is a greater access to foreign culture in the form of movies, music, food, clothing, and more. Second, they think globalization brought economical effect. Also, knowledge and technologies exchanged and was shared among countries. Globalization provides the people of the developing countries different kinds of jobs to live their lives and the developed ones a great many benefits.
Nevertheless, globalization is not always positive. Although positive effects still exist, we should be aware of its negative impacts for the future for ourselves and people all over the world. Plus, we need to be more aware of Internet's contribution to globalization.
First, in economical aspects, globalization which make the world connected by Internet has brought much bigger gap between the poor and the rich. According to BBC, Globalization operates mostly in the interests of the richest countries, which continue to dominate world trade at the expense of developing countries. This tendency leads governments of developed countries to allow their corporations to build their factories outside of their own countries. However, this phenomenon take away the industrial foundation of their own and opportunities of economical growth. The corporations want to use low wages in foreign countries which increase their profit margins. International corporations build their factories all over the world and exploit labor and take away their development opportunities.This tendency leads to much bigger the gap between the rich and the poor. India can be an example of this phenomenon. At first, people think India has a benefit from globalization, which gained lots of profits from new industries that related to international corporations. However, most average people's lives in India say differently. They say that poverty became more serious than before. One in three Indians live on less than $1 a day and India is still home to the world's largest conglomeration of malnourished people. Also, The latest UN Human Development Report worries the gap between the rich and the poor by economical growth and social progress. A narrow-based and weak foundation of economical become serious problem. Another problem is that inequalities that globalization has failed to remove. Even though a few people may evaluate globalization positively, its effects don't always be good or positive. That's why politicians have latched onto the idea of the disappearing middle class as a political issue, but none of their income redistribution schemes are likely to have any immediate substantial impact. It makes some Anti-globalization campaigners try to draw people's attention to these points by demonstrating against the World Trade Organization. They think the WTO is the cause of free flow of trade around the world.
Another serious problem which is caused by globalization is cultural aspects. Globalization is viewed by many as a threat to the world's cultural diversity. Some people concern about that globalization decrease or remove local economy, tradition and languages by capitalism and the power of developed countries. For instance, a Hollywood film is far more likely to be successful worldwide than one made in India or China, which also have thriving film industries.
All these impacts of globalization are related to the development of information technology. In the core of IT, there is the development of the Internet. Most people can use Internet without any disturbance, however, not all people are able to join the global community made by the Internet. Countries in the developing world are not able to take advantage of the Internet in the same way as developed nations can. There is no universally equal access to Internet all over the world. Some people from countries like North Korea has few opportunities to access Internet because its government censor it. Also, some poor countries have no opportunities to use any IT products. Therefore, disadvantages people and businesses in developing nations who are unable to take advantage of the Internet's global potential. Through the development of Internet and its contribution to globalization, we can know how it affects globalization and our lives negatively and why we should be aware of it. We need to consider the negative aspects of globalization, not just think positively and accept it unquestioningly.
Some people may disagree with the opinion that Internet has contributed negatively to globalization. For example, some people appreciate globalization because they think globalization has connected the whole world so people are more available to communicate much easier than before due to the Internet. Also, like Pascal Salin insist, globalization brought development of internet and telecommunication techniques. The requirement of more convenient and fast technology of Internet has made more improved technology of Internet. It is true that Internet make the world connected. However, not all people can enjoy the convenience of the connection. People who can not access on the Internet can't experience such convenience, also they , someone who are not economically or politically available, can't get enough information as much as others. As James Buchanan says that people communicate to gain and not to lose, but globalization can be malevolent to some people. The informational gap between the rich and the poor become much bigger than before and it leads to the economical gap between them. Therefore, the connections between people are only relevant who have power or money. Ron manners claims that most people are in favor of globalization because they think it is beneficial to them so people should listen to the opinions from public and majorities. However, if his thought were true, there wouldn't be any anti-globalization. Recently, according to Catherine Eschle, anti-globalization has emerged for the negative effects of globalization. As I mentioned before, people who are against to globalization had protests for the anti-WTO. They thought that WTO has promoted free market which has encouraged the richer-get-richer phenomenon. We should think about the people who are damaged by internet development and expanded trades. Also, people who think globalization positively suggest that globalization make people understand different cultures and notions. However, some dominant culture prohibited cultural variety in the world and rather interrupt understanding each other. Therefore, although the benefits of globalization has existed, internet has contributed negatively , so we should be aware of danger from it.
In the future, we will live in a more developed world. People will use advanced technology and will contact people much more conveniently. We can appreciate those improvements because this achievements are from our ancestors and ours efforts. On the other hand. we should think about the danger of the globalization and the contribution of internet to globalization. We should remember how globalization which related to Internet has brought much bigger poverty and frustration to those who can't live in an affluent life. Internet which has brought all the convenient and new world is not always positive to people. Because of the Internet, our own culture, notion and our happiness can be removed from our lives and some other things can dominate. We should not neglect the power of Internet and globalization. We always think the both negative and positive side and live in wise life.
Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
I think this essay deserves 4. The perspective is unique- The globalization is not always positive. I think there is a thorough research in this essay.
How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
To improve to get a better grade, I think it would be better to polish her writing style.
Thesis
What is the thesis?
The globalization is not always positive.
Is the thesis clear and debatable?
The thesis is clear and debatable. It is also mentioned in the Harvard Sampler.
If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
If I wrote this essay, I would have written that "The globalization is negative"
Any other thoughts?
Nope
Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
I can easily identify 5 parts.
Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?
I thought the introduction was interesting, and it is related to thesis.
Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
Yes. I could easily understand because of the definition of 'globalization' and effects of Internet.
Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
Yes. She categorized her evidences, such as economical aspects and cultural aspects.
Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
Yes. Her refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint, She refuted the counterpoint adequately by mentioning generalization error.
Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis?
Yes. It summarizes why the globalization can be negative to people well.
What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
In the conclusion part, I want to recommend not to just summarize the facts that are already mentioned above. Rather, I want to recommend to analogize something similar to it.
Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
I agree with the thesis.
When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
.I agree with the thesis
If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
I didn't change my mind.
How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
I think she should emphasize her argument more in the conclusion.
Research
Is the author using research effectively?
yes
Is the research from appropriate sources?
yes
Are the sources obvious?
yes
Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
yes it's relevant
Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
I think there are enough evidences in her essay
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